- #1
"One minute she was a thorn in his side and the next minute she was a lump in his throat and an ache in his groin."
- As if the cheesy "ache in his groin" factor wasn't enough to have this sentence edited out, it was located on page 10. Page 10! I guess I didn't waste any time back in '89.-- Janet
- #2
"I just used the portable scanner as an excuse to see you. I know this is a little sudden, but the truth is I'm painfully attracted to you..."
- Just what every woman wants to hear. I guess this has something to do with his "aching groin". Now we know why the hero was still single-- he needed better pick-up lines.-- Janet
- #3
"Steve Crow was definitely more man than most in several ways. One was much more noticeable than the others."
- I can't believe I actually wrote this. I guess Steve Crow didn't need Enzyte.-- Janet
- #4
"She was a woman too long deprived of purely selfish pleasures, and now she kissed him with wanton abandon."
- This is how I feel every time I see a donut. The actual edited piece went on and on and ended with "When it came it was cataclysmic". I feel like that about donuts, too.-- Janet
- #5
"I should have put my hair up... I'd give my kingdom for a rubber band."
- My editor pointed out that people use scrunchies now and not rubber bands. If only she had known what my daughter Alex, knows about hair accessories. Alex was horrified to read about the tortoise shell combs Daisy wears in chapter one. It's so hard to be cool.-- Janet
- #6
"Last time I sucked so hard my teeth came loose."
- Get your minds out of the gutter. It's in reference to the heroine drinking a milkshake. I changed it to "I gave myself a headache". Didn't think the visual image of a toothless heroine was too appealing.-- Janet
- #7
"...suckling the tip through her lacy bra..."
- I don't know what's worse, the word "suckling" or some guy slobbering all over your good bra that has to be hand washed.-- Janet
- #8
"Daisy imagined it was the sort of fire that could sweep across a woman's body and leave her gasping. Part of her was drawn to that fire. Another part of her, the sensible Daisy, said 'No way.'"
- The "sensible" Daisy sounds like as much fun as "sensible" shoes. Lucky for you, the passage I replaced this with, according to Alex, is even more cheesy than sensible Daisy.-- Janet
- #9
"Her stomach tumbled... Her mind went blank. Daisy, she silently shouted, get a grip! This wasn't sexual groping. This was an innocent scrunching together.'"
- Not to worry, Daisy. There will be plenty of groping later.-- Janet
- #10
"...now she was dragging a diamond the size of Mount McKinley around on her finger.'"
- I changed Mount McKinley to "walnut". Alex later informed me that it in future editings of romance novels it would be best if I didn't compare things to "walnuts".-- Janet
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